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Shadow
07-22-2015, 10:58 AM
We posted 2 monster profiles today from our upcoming zombie, action RPG, Zombasite. You can check out the Targ and Zombie Targ on the Zombasite monster page (http://www.soldak.com/Zombasite/Monsters.html).

joku
07-22-2015, 11:40 AM
There is a typo.

Variants: Variants: Ferocious Targ (shown), Fury Targ, Berserk Targ, Frenzy Targ, and Insane Targ

Shadow
07-22-2015, 11:47 AM
Fixed. Thanks.

Roswitha
08-04-2015, 12:22 PM
Just a couple of notes.

"Even though the Zombasite (zombie parasites) are out of control"
In the Overview, you described the Zombasite as a singular entity. So, parasites should be singular and "are" should be "is".

Frenzy Targ - "This armor plated reptile is named..." Need a dash between armor and plated.

Zombie Frenzy Targ - "thus they go into their frenzy mode much easier." "easier" should be "more easily". You're using an adjective to describe a verb.

Shadow
08-04-2015, 12:47 PM
"Even though the Zombasite (zombie parasites) are out of control"
In the Overview, you described the Zombasite as a singular entity. So, parasites should be singular and "are" should be "is".

Most of this is fixed.

I usually use the word Zombasite like we would when saying the Plague. I'm not trying to imply that it is one entity, but one disease. Disease isn't really the right word, but it's close enough.